can I get feedback on my website please?

[*Jess♥]

hey all,

I have been working on my personal website for promoting my abilities in design etc.

I'd like to get some feedback please.

I'm looking for real honesty.

of course I don't want you to insult me, but if the only way of saying something is very blunt, then by all means say it.

I want to make it the best that I can.

thanks.

http://www.tremault.tk

[Bio-Boosted Dude]

I don't think it's quite as sleek a job as what you've done with this place or taaherbs. i think it largely has to do with the bright colours which feel a little CBeebies. Perhaps its also the over-abundance of century gothic and large text for the main body. these are the things that stick out to me immediately

[*Jess♥]

thanks very much.

do you think the larger text and the bright colours is a bad thing?

perhaps it gives the wrong impression?

I've often used muted colours for my work in the past, but I am thinking bold and bright colours can promote a positive feeling. maybe it is too much and too garish?

I made the text large, based on my witnessing of my friend who always zooms in on a page on his monitor because the text is too small. there is also the fact that there is not a great deal of content in the site. I can only say so much and i need to make sure the space is used well. perhaps i can use the space more wisely by attempting to increase my text content (trying to avoid hyperbole) and adding various icons and perhaps some 'toys'.

[*YoungGuyver]

It is interesting that you are useing first person to describe yourself, most other sites of this nature that I see use third person. I don't know if that's good or bad.

Don't say anything negative about yourself! Don't mention your limitations, or ask for forgivness. You are not a begging dog, you are a trained professional with skills. Act like it. Have the confidence to back it up, and instill your employers confidence in you. How can they have it if you don't, and why would they hire you if they don't?

I can't see youtube from China, but I can see your pics. Take out anything blurry, or with glares from the glass. Maybe mix it up a bit so we can see a variety from the start. Abnd focus on the glory shots. I don't need ten shots of the street in front of your house, but one with the street lights is great. Then show me a view from the Japanese skyscraper. That shows me you are versatile. The cougar was great, but the tiger was behind a cage and suggest you were an amateur that went to the zoo. Lose it, you are the guy that takes risks for a great shot. You can't show me a hundred pics in order to convince me to hire you, you have to narrow it down. You've got stuff in there that can blow the mind, but it's being watered down by the regular shots. Remove the regulars and show the gold. After all, the buisiness will always shoot a million regular shots, but editing is about cutting it to only show a 'moment'.

I'd like to talk more, but off to Beijing in just a bit.

[*Jess♥]

hey thanks man.

I really appreciate it, you really went in depth.

this is really valuable.

I did write my words to be as positive as I could make them. seems I did not go far enough!

oh the main about me section was copied from my résumé. it does need rewording. I'll need to get on that soon.

thanks for the advice about editing my photo gallery. I'm linking to my flickr account so it is kind of all the pictures I value personally. it's difficult to think about editing these as i can't maintain separate accounts. I want to upload things for my family and friends as well so it ends up having all of those on there. but perhaps i can restrict those shots for my twitter account. I'll definitely try and edit that.

hope you're enjoying china

edit:

I took out a ton of photos.

if there are any you remember, that I've taken out but you thought was really good, please tell me and I'll put it back. (I hope I have local copies of them... )

or if there are really bad ones that I've left in, tell me about those too.

[durendal]

Ah, I see that you're posting your resume online. I can't say much about the design of the site since my taste in creativity is very dense. But keeping it simple is a nice touch and very effective. It's also a nice touch to have individual tabs showcasing certain skills. But to be completely honest, your first page doesn't contain enough significant information that would prompt me to hire you. I won't have the luxury of time to navigate your site to check out your capabilities. Most likely, I will just look at your "about" page and decide from there. You might want to include more of your accomplishments. Building a website with a massive community from a small website is a very nice touch. You should add information similar to those. Something that you can boast about, since you are actually selling yourself. Have you done work that was featured somewhere? The key words here is to "impress".

Also, try to limit the information about your skill set in the about page, since practically anybody who can go online will most likely have the same skill set you have or more. You may mention a few then add a phrase that goes something like "and other technical programs". I think a separate tab would fit nicely for listing all your skills. I'm surprised you did not mention your skill in language. Ability to speak several language is a great plus, especially for multi-national corporations. Not to brag here, but when I was first interviewed by the COO of the company many years back, I literally "wowed" them with my language skills.

[Bio-Boosted Dude]

thanks very much.

do you think the larger text and the bright colours is a bad thing?

perhaps it gives the wrong impression?

I've often used muted colours for my work in the past, but I am thinking bold and bright colours can promote a positive feeling. maybe it is too much and too garish?

You know, i really like that gradiant you have at the bottom of the page. was your intention to have it behind the main box, or is it supposed to be all the way at the bottom like that? it might make it a little less garish than orange on bright blue

[*Jess♥]

cheers durendal, this is a great perspective.

I am unsure about my skill set, I think these skills are not so common around this area but perhaps i am mistaken. I'll try and focus my initial section on achievements and best work rather than a general overview. I can always just add a link to my actual résumé.

I could include my japanese skill. I don't have very good speaking and listening skill, but I am getting better at translating, using various tools.

bbdude,

I see what you are saying. I think your screen is possibly about the same size as mine. I imagined that most people would have large monitors these days and i tailored it for a monitor about twice the size of mine. the gradient you see is part of a large-ish background image. if you use your browser to zoom out, you will see what i did. perhaps i can adjust that to make the gradient start higher.

edit: I've just worked with colour balancing to give it a more gentle, subdued feeling. hopefully that is more pleasant to look at.

[Bio-Boosted Dude]

much nicer colours now

and i zoomed out and i can see what you're doing now. i hadn't noticed that the design went high enough to go behind the main content box before (maybe it was the colours), but now it makes more sense.

[*Jess♥]

ok thanks for all this feedback so far guys

I have edited the content and colours and resized the font.

I'm thinking of converting my CV (résumé) into a pdf format and link it on the bottom of the 'about' section.

[Aether]

i can't offer much help here, other than saying it looks like it does the job of what you want it to i.e: i cant ofer any advice on how it looks in term of design as i know nothig about web design etc. to say oh you should do this or that...

only thing i would suggest is for the 'about' section - i would split up the writing so its not just one big clump of text as that can be over facing ( i learnt that i think from some of my crazily long posts on here so now i tnd to split the writing up a bit more in appropriate places i think it looks more inviting)

so.....

hi i'm....

i am a...

i have maintained a....

i am self taught in japanese....

i am seeking employment....

[*Jess♥]

cheers dude

the only problem there is that it needs to fit in that box.

if i use double spaced paragraphs, it will surely not fit.

or do you mean it in another way, like not double spaced, just a next line paragraph?

[Aether]

haha good question i dont know, i think i mean just next line paragraphs ...

i'll copy and paste it here and edit it how i mean, feel free to edit my post if you wish to remove it from here...

my suggestion may not be exactly where you would wish to split it but i'll leave that to you, if you do so.
 

Hi, my name is .

I am a highly driven & capable individual. I graduated from NEWI University in 2008 with a BA in Animation. I am highly proficient in many computer programs including Adobe Photoshop and 3DSmax. I thoroughly enjoy design, photography, video production, problem solving and exploration. My

has featured on the E4 website when I entered into the Estings competition.

I have maintained a web presence since 1998, building up from a small webpage to a large website with a massive community. I learnt these skills on the fly as there were not many courses back then.I can learn most skills incredibly quickly with minimal assistance.

I am self taught in Japanese up to a beginner/intermediate level in speaking and listening. I can translate from Japanese with the use of tools up to a 90% accuracy.

I am seeking employment in a Marketing Firm or ad-hoc work on a freelance basis.
 

[*YoungGuyver]

what I don't get. is why aren't you using a reel? A 30 second video featuring the best snippets from all the animation work you have ever done in your life. THAT is a great way to sell yourself. Why talk about your skills when you can simply show them? Make the clip start as soon as the page loads up.

[*Jess♥]

because quite honestly, I don't want to focus too much on animation

sure, it is what I graduated in, but I did that because it was the closest thing to video games in our town university.

I don't want to play it down, because it's something I can do, but I also don't want to laud it up too much.

do you know what I mean?

cheers