New Writer for GWOTG fic

[W'Kar]

There is a new writer for GWOTG focusing on a yet unspoken portion of the story. It involves the story of the Khemet, the People of the Order of Anubis. The story takes place on a planet called Zelu'Xianus where a civilization which worships the god Anubis lies. The story base has a strong resemblance to fantasy stories because the setting relies on a middle age technology level. I hope you all enjoy it.

The writer is Valsharess, who will be joining the forum at a later date. Her writing is something I've enjoyed for many a year and hope all of you do too. I will post the whole fic on the GWOTG site once I get a chance to add a section up for her.

With no further ado!

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Episode One

The Awakening

[6]

Quiet. These days, mornings were always dreadfully quiet in the temple district. Almost as quiet as the Champion Halls of Themes-Zera's Courtyard; it was midsummer and the Mardions were in training, not competing. A shame, High Priestess Asthen'ri so enjoyed the arena matches.

The 'crunch crunch' of footfalls upon the sand echoed in the vast courtyard that lead to the main temple. Temple Del’Cious. Like a snake behind her, the High Priestess's robe swayed and fluttered here and there doing an almost tempting dance alongside her graceful movements. Suddenly, all was quiet again.

She had stopped. Asthen'ri could never make it past the temple's entrance without stopping before the statue that acted as its doorway... It took four-hundred masonry men to sculpt, carve, and lay the two-hundred and sixty feet marvel before the temple's entrance. The same four-hundred gave their lives to color the statue with their own blood. Glorious! They would be remembered for all time. A man, young and mighty, sat at a large and ornate throne. His blood red armor was carved beyond any mortal's eye of intricacy, his hair flowed long almost melting into the regal cape that was draped over his right arm, and on his left, he grasped a long stave with an ankh decorating its head. Asthen'ri looked upon the face of her Dehan ("Lord or God") and smiled. No other power was greater, and in this image she was reminded of that power. The power of a true god! The High Priestess could dally no longer, and wiping a small bead of sweat from her brow she hurried herself along.

Clutching a large tome tightly to her bosom and smiling all along, Asthen'ri entered he massive temple. A vast square hall made entirely of basalt; eight tall windows framed in red limestone and cut at a slight angle provided the temple with enough illumination that one was rumored to be able to see to its very end! The ceiling was supported by one thousand columns, each with a tapering finely fluted shaft resting on a torus with a circular base resembling that of a talon, or claw. They were made of black marble, polished to such a sheen that often times newcomers were startled at the amount of people within the temple only to realize it was their own reflection. Asthen'ri approached the main dais of the temple, it was lowered by at least four feet, circular, and twenty feet in diameter. Around its upper edge sat dozens of priestesses, all sitting quietly and humming. The base itself held three things; a lectern made entirely of gold, a red brazier its glowing fire licking wildly of the air around it, and finally a tall slab of black steel. More a table than a piece of furniture. Where normally there stood an altar, today, there was a rack of sorts. It was lifted up to allow its resident, Mhan'ri, to be in an upright position. She was bound by her wrists and ankles, and still, even after all this time, slept soundly.

Dear daughter, today you shall be a proud woman... Today, of all days, you shall be a Khemet. A child of our Dehan. Asthen'ri thought.

The High Priestess calmly approached her daughter and smiled. Mhan'ri was her youngest, having given eight children to the Ascendancy and three others already well into the priesthood, Mhan'ri was the last to be brought into the Blood-Circle. How proud she was! She lifted a soft hand and moved a lock of hair from her daughter's face. Asthen'ri stood once again behind the lectern and placed her tome upon it. The words of their Dehan, written by his most devout servants and brought only to the truly faithful... As she opened the tome she looked upon her daughter once more and removed her heavy robe.

Asthen'ri threw her robe into the brazier, now, wearing only a light silken dress her own sweat causing it to cling to her sides showing slight glimpses of the skin beneath; the robe burned letting out an odd blue hued smoke. Immediately four priestesses lifted large fans and began to fan at the smoke. In a moment's notice Mhan'ri's nostrils flared and her eyes shot open.

Mhan'ri threw her head hard against the rack, she craned her neck, and arched her back writhing for release. She tried everything she could to escape, she would not. Asthen'ri smiled slightly looking upon her daughter's form as it moved, so often did she remind her of her own youth. So graceful in movement... so beautiful. Soon, she would be more than that. Now that her thirteenth year had come Mhan'ri would truly be herself. She would be Awoken.

Edited July 27, 2007 by Guest

[W'Kar]

Episode 1 is now up under the W'Kar saga temporarily while I readjust the main page. Check it out and let me know what you guys think?

[Juggernought]

Wow, i really like this in depth look at the actual people that worship and follow Anubis willingly. Another reason we can all see it fit so nicely is because when we either imagine or watch movies from medival times, there were always cults around involved in many arcane things in the pursuit of their beliefs.

Interestingly enough i'm surprised that many of the older generation were remnants of the humans from earth. (Before reading further i thought that perhaps Anubis had claimed a small number of the creator warriors and converted them.)

As well as the fact that they are trying to reach perfection albeit by a different way. Is Anubis creating a similar race to that of the evolved humans the creators use in their army?

Also...much respect to the newest addition to the writing team and a warm welcome. If this is but a small taste of what you are capable of, i can't wait to see what all is in store for us.

[W'Kar]

Many answers about the story will be kept intentially unanswered. Basically it's up to the reader to figure it out, or decide what they believe.

[Juggernought]

From this race is the majority of advanced lycanlords created from? For me it would make sense as the only advanced lycanlords we see in battle is Zagam, Baphomet and Yaksha and we know there are more so perhaps this is one of the benefits when they are chosen for ascension?

[Aranor]

I'm almost curious if the people in the fic are nothing more than a domesticated (Poor chioce but only one I could think of) form of lycanlords. The need to feed so much bread out of them and a more civilized mentally.

[guyverfanatic]

Eh, it was alright. I'll need to read more of it to get a better feel of it.

[Valsharess]

Thanks you guys for the critique. As of right now I am working on Episode 2 though it is taking alot more out of me than expected (As it seems I have fallen in love with the main character ).

I have been advised under penalty of pain (Lots of pain) not to answer any questions regarding race, setting, technology, or the Order's Plots. Sorry. Seeing as the 'Dark Lord' has expressed he wishes me to answer questions of the story itself (I.E. "When will you update"? "Couldn't you revise blah-blah paragraph?") then I shall remain quiet on the subject!

As for critique - I love to get it. If you believe the story needs revisions or perhaps the next installment could have something you missed with the last lemme know!

Before I leave I would just like to point out - When I write these stories, they are in the perspective of said individual or event. Thus, the narrator has the same opinions and knowledge as the person or persons within the story. So, don't be surprised with all the "Anubis glorification". That, and I am partial to The Order.

[Juggernought]

Can't wait for the next installment...definately gives the Order a more dynamic and enthralling appeal. (apart from the action of course)