Shenzon

Thanks...when you say more definition, do you mean like in the action or on the characters? (I'll take any advice I can)

Whoo-hooo!!! Can't wait!!

That is sweet! How far along are you on the story? Are you going to start before the Creators took him, or after when he returns to earth?

Thanks Spartan Warlord....I was worried that it was really terrible. This was my first time writing anything. I have so many ideas. I was thinking of writing a fanfic on a female coming across the warrior unit, but I accidentally left my laptop open with my fanfic on the screen. My wife liked it, and wanted me to pursue this...so I guess I'll probably stick with this. Don't worry Spartan Warlord, you'll do as good as I did or better. I just wrote or typed exactly what I saw in my mind. Sometimes it was hard to get the exact picture on paper, but after re-wording it, I was able too. In my mind the fanfic is a few chapters further. I don't know why but for some reason doing it that way works for me. It gives me a clearer picture to put on paper.

Man...all I can say is wow!! That is one bad-mama-jama!

Sorry, I thought you were saying Atrahasis old data file.

Yeah, that is true. His abilities do have checks and balances.

Where is his old datafile?

What if W'kar teamed up with Dreadnought, what do you think the outcome would be?

Hey everyone, this is my first time writing anything....but after joining this website, I couldn't help but write. I have so many ideas. Please read and let me know. I know my writing skills suck though, but hey, be honest. My character's name under the armor is Damion Reese. I don't want to offend anyone by writing this or take anything from anyone. I'm thinking of doing full one on a female, but wrote something small and put it here because I've never written, and just want to know about my writing skills in general. I'm going to let the wifey read it after I hear the opinions here... The Warrior Guyver’s control medal flashed, and before him appeared to the outer hull of the ship, directly on the platform he used to get in the ship. As he walked toward the exit, his hyper sensors began sliding back and forth on their tracks, as they picked up around 25 zoanoids and something else waiting for him. He didn’t care…. he was ready!! The zoanoids got on guard as the entrance to the dark War Relic opened. There was a glow light approaching the entrance, as the new Warrior units control medal was lighting the chamber as he walked out. He was not like any Guyver they had ever seen. Even Arlene Crane’s who watched jaw dropped! He’d fought Guyver 1, Guyver 3, as well as both in their gigantic forms, and nothing compared to what this thing looked like! From his feet on up, he was definitely designed for war. He had blades protruding from the sides of his ankles, as well as his heels. He also had blades protruding from his knees. His gravity orb was pyramid shaped. He had a total of 8 blades on his arms. Four on each arm. Four facing rear, and 4 facing forward with what looked to Arlene like, laser orbs between the four forward facing blades on each arm. Not to mention he had what looked like some sort of power crystals around his body, which were all glowing. They all seemed to be placed around a Guyver’s power channeling organs, on the forearms, back of wrists, hips, calves, and on the front of his ankles. Purgstall was also taking this all in through one of the camera’s he was looking through examining the unknown unit. It kind of reminded him of Guyver 3 as this one also had horns on his head. But the helmet area was different. He had 2 more horns, and what looked like 2 laser orbs in addition to the standard one above the control on either sides of his control medal like the Gigantics. His control medal was also pyramid shaped! His shoulders were different as well. They were pointed, and he had two sets, an upper and lower one. His unit was also black with certain areas lightly glowing in purple, like his body was constantly channeling power, with orange biomaterial underneath. Up in the main office, Purgstall knew he was going to be trouble. Warrior Guyver stopped on the top step as his control medal flashed, and his unit blew steam through his exhaust vents. He looked around at all the zoanoids that were waiting for him. He smiled to himself. He then looked over his shoulder as his control medal flashed as the opening to the ship closed behind him. A Gregole was the first to act. It leaped up in the air and came down towards Warrior Guyver, who just waited for him. When he was still in the air and about 6 feet from him, Warrior Guyver did a round house, kicking the zoanoid square in the chest, sending it slamming back on the ground where it leaped from. It rolled over holding its caved in chest, barely able to breathe while vomiting blood. Now it was Warrior Guyver’s turn. He jumped in the air, somersaulted, and landed about 8 feet from the group, who then charged at him. His control medal flashed, and he felt his first weapons come online, as he had yet to learn how to use it. He felt energy channel its way to the blades on his forearms as they extended outward. Unfortunately for these zoanoids, swords and small knives were his weapons of choice. He began slicing them, left and right. All around him, zoanoids were dropping like flies. Arlene looked on and could easily tell, that the new Warrior Guyver was skillful with swords. He smiled to himself…. as he couldn’t wait to challenge him. Since his unit was repaired from being damaged by the Guyver somewhere within the U.S., he has under gone numerous levels of combat training, but has yet been able to face anyone worth challenging…until now. “This is going to be fun,” he said to himself. Standing on the left and right of him, were four enzyme 3’s waiting to attack. They were told, if the unit was activated to use their bio-armor eating enzymes, to remove the control medal immediately, and bring it to Purgstall. About 30 seconds and 21 zoanoids later after the fight started, all that was left was the Warrior Guvyer holding the last zoanoid by the face, as he crushed it while he was looking at his last 5 opponents. He let the corpse fall as he turned to face them. All around him, the zoanoids were decomposing. The four enzymes immediately attacked. They were quicker than he expected and almost caught him off guard. The first one reached him and attempted to slice him with its claws. The other three fanned out and tried to come up around him. He ducked both attempts to slice him, and dodged the third. He caught the fourth by ducking under it, coming up on the outside of its swing, catching it by the wrists with his own right hand, and punched it square in the elbow from the outside in, snapping it. The creature roared in pain. His hyper sensors sliding in their tracks, warning him of the other three moving in to attack from his sides and rear, he knew he had to finish this one off quickly. He kneed it in the chest, his control medal flashed, then his knee blade immediately extended, through the creatures heart, spine, then out its back about two feet. He retracted the blade and pushed the creature off of him, only to feel a burning sensation, which felt like his leg was on fire. The pain was so intense that it brought him down to one knee, as the blood from the enzyme, was eating away at his armor. The pain brought his attention away from the other enzymes around him, as one took a swipe at his back. He sensed it at the last minute, and tried to roll with the blow, but still ended up getting his back sliced, with the acid leaving four claw marks across his back. When he got back to his feet, he took a few steps back to give himself some room, as the enzymes started to move in. Just then, his control medal flashed, as his exhaust vents also flashed hot air. His unit sent him information that it had adapted to the enzyme acid, and it no longer affected him as it began rapidly healing his wounds. He smiled inward to himself. “Round two!!” he says The enzymes had no idea what he was talking about, and one leaped for him, but Warrior Guyer was ready this time. He leaped into the zoanoid, completely surprising it and punched his fist right through its chest, forcing it back into its comrades with Warrior Guyver’s fist still in its chest. The two remaining enzymes leaped out of the way, but by the time they landed, Warrior Guyver was pulling his fist out of the chest of their dead comrade. The couldn’t figure out why the enzyme wasn’t eating away his armor. They looked at Arlene who too had a shocked and confused look on his face. But what scared them even more was that when they looked at his wounds, his knee was already half way healed and his back was three quarters of the way healed. The two remaining enzymes knew they were in trouble and decided to attack together. Warrior Guyver stepped into the nearest ones attack, catching him by the arm and flipping him over into the other one, sending the two crashing to the ground and sliding back about 15 feet. He swung his arms outward and extended his four rear blades, and charged the enzymes. Seeing him coming, they quickly got up and tried to jump out the way, but both ended up coming out of the deal missing a limb. One a leg, and the other an arm. Both enzyme 3’s decided to change tactics and took flight. Warrior Guyver’s control medal flashed, as his wound on his back finished healing, with his knee wound three quarters of the way healed. Warrior Guyver, being a new Guyver, had no idea the full range of his abilities. So when the 2 enzymes took to the air, he looked to his left; and in matter of a few seconds after the enzymes took to the air, he ran, jumped on to the wheel of one the drills nearby that Chronos was using to attempt to drill into the War Relic, and leaped into the air after the enzymes with his blades still brandished. Both of the enzymes flew out of his line of path, but one attempted to swat him with its tail. Warrior Guyver just cut it off with his blades. The other enzyme flew towards him, realizing this new Guyver didn’t know Guyver’s could fly, but what he didn’t expect was for Warrior Guyver to land on a vertical beam coming down from the roof to the floor, and leap back at the enzyme. It was completely taken by surprised, and was sliced right in half from head to groin. Warrior Guyver landed on the ground, looked up as the last enzyme was diving in at him. A few feet from him, it spent around and tried to spear him with its tail. Warrior Guyver parried the attacked as the enzyme shot back up in the air. His leg wound closing up. “drenn. Coward!!” He screamed at the enzyme. Then his control medal began to glow, as he felt another of his weapons activate as his unit sensed that he needed a way to reached this airborne threat, energy channeled to the orb above his control medal as well as the two on the sides of the medal, and three laser shot through the air. All 3 struck the zoanoid and blew out his backside. One in the chest, and one in each shoulder also blasting through his wings, dropping him to the ground. “Can’t do drenn, when you have to use your two feet, can you?” Warrior Guyver said, slowly walking up to the enzyme. He noticed, he also had an orb on each wrist. He then turned to his side and pointed his right arm towards the zoanoid, fired another beam which caught the creature as it was lifting its head up, in the neck, completely decapitating it. He watched as the creature started to smoke, and a few moments later, started to dissolve. Then he turned, and looked at Arlene Crane, who was clapping his hands and started walking towards Warrior Guyver. “Not bad…for a rookie.” He said, as he stopped about 12 feet from Warrior Guyver. Warrior Guyver figured, this guy must be really stupid, or must have some sort of trick up his sleeve, so he started to scan him as his orbs started sliding back and forth in their tracks. He could sense…. the Guyver within him! He was a Guyver also. But, he was different somehow…even though he was a Guyver, his body was still different somehow. “Don’t play games with me! I don’t have the time.” Warrior Guyver said crossing his arms. “Summon your unit, so we can get this over with!” That immediately dropped the smile off Arlene’s face, as he was left wondering, how the hell could he know he was a Guyver? No matter he thought to himself. “You won’t be able to defeat me. I’m not like any other…GUYVER!!!” He screamed out, as a blast field surrounded him, then his unit appeared behind him, and wrapped itself around its hosts. Arlene’s unit vented heat from his exhaust ports as his control medal then flashed as his eyes also lit up. He started to laugh slowly as his body began changing underneath, as well as his unit. A few moments later, and Arlene’s true form was now visible. Now Warrior Guyver knew why his sensor’s were detecting something different within him. Arlene was a Guyver Zoanoid. “As I said Warrior Guyver, despite your…. unique unit, you still cannot defeat me. Like you, I am the only one of my kind.” Warrior Guyver laughed, “ Actually Guyver Zoanoid, your yesterdays model.” He says taking a fighting stance. This angered Guyver Zoanoid as he too took a fighting stance “Fine…I’ll prove it.” Both fighters’ hyper sensors began sliding in their tracks, bringing up as much information as possible on their opponents. Warrior Guyver could sense that Guyver Zoanoids power levels were high, but were still of no threat to him as long as he was careful. Guyver Zoanoid could sense that Warrior Guyver’s power level was well beyond his, but didn’t know how far. With the Warrior Guyver being a new guyver, he should be able to defeat him, and remove his Control Medal for his masters. He smiled at the thought of the respect he would get for this. Arlene’s ego always drove him, as he was the only zoanoid that was also a Guvyer, as well as the only Guyver within Chronos, that is until Guyver 2’s control medal is repaired, which gave him respect from hyper zoanoids up to even Proto-Zoalords. Though without the unit, his power level was around that of a low level zoanoid. Both their eyes glowed as they charged each, with both Guyvers rearing back their right fists, both throwing a blow at the same time with their fist colliding in front of them. The release of so much power, created a 6-foot wide 2-foot deep crater around them…. Purg’stall watched on through the cameras, but then his attention was brought away as he received a telepathic message from Imakuram, the ruling leader of Chronos while Alkanphel now slept. “What is the status of the War Relic?” Imakuram asked. He was already aware of the situation with the unit being accidentally activated, but wanted to see if Purg’stall would even tell him. “The unit within was accidentally activated. We are attempting to recapture it now.” He decided to skip the part about his zoanoids being so easily defeated…”We’ve been constantly monitoring its battle so far, and are recording all information of its fighting abilities. It would appear to be immune to enzyme’s acid. Its hosts would also appear to be unaware of the units full potential.” “Very well, keep me informed. By the way…do not let the Guyver Zoanoid be destroyed. We exhausted a lot of resources on his revival, and cannot replace him.” Purg’stall felt Imakuram’s attitude change on that last part. “Huh…uhh, of course my lord.” He replied as he felt the feeling of Imakuram leave his mind. He immediately turned to one of his subordinates. “Get me a Hyper Zoanoid Team 5 ready. Tell them to stand by for my command.” The soldier bowed, walked to an internal intercom system and made the call. Back to the battle… A few minutes had gone by and they had shifted their battle to another part of the massive chamber. Guyver Zoanoid by this time was unable to find an opening in Warrior Guyver’s defense. He was clearly more skillful than he had thought. Warrior Guyver on the other hand, was fighting on pure adrenaline. His fighting skills, determination, and drive to win, mixed with the units genetic battle design and instinct, was making him a formidable opponent for Guyver Zoanoid. So he decided to change his tactics and went on the offensive. His training kicked in as he began bringing down on the Warrior Guyver, precise punches and kicks. But it still wasn’t enough. The Warrior Guyver easily blocked them all. He threw a weak left punch to the Warrior Guyver’s chest expecting him to block it, which he did as he planned, and spent around hoping the catch Warrior Guyver with an elbow to the temple, but when he spent around he’d lost site of his target as he’d ducked his elbow leaving him to swing wide leaving his center mass wide open to attack. Warrior Guvyer didn’t hesitate and gave Guyver Zoanoid three quick punches to the chest, sending him stumbling back a few feet to get some room, holding his chest in pain. “That’s nothing!!” He yelled, refusing to show his pain and anger, extending his blades. “Ha ha…I’m sure it isn’t. But don’t worry, I’ll be sure to try a little harder this time.” Warrior Guyver responded, extending his forward blades only and trying to anger Guyver Zoanoid by targeting his ego. He knew, if he angered him, he’d slip up sooner or later. Guyver Zoanoid attacked first, as he brought his right arm with his vibrational blade gleaming, as he tried to slice Warrior Guyver in half with the outside of his blade by swinging it outward, but Warrior Guyver ducked it. He then immediately tried to spear him with his left forward blade, but Warrior Guyver parried the attack with his right forward blade. Guyver Zoanoid then brought his right forward blade back into play by bringing it down on Warrior Guyver who brought his left forward blade over his head and blocked Guyver Zoanoids attack. Leaving the two starring at each other in a test of strength as Guyver Zoanoid was still trying to press his attack, by trying to pin Warrior Guyver between his blades. But Warrior Guyver was easily standing up to Guyver Zoanoid’s strength, just holding him where he was. “I hope you have more than that Guyver Zoanoid. My turn” Warrior Guyver said as he pushed outward, forcing Guyver Zoanoids arms open as he did a backwards cartwheel kicking Guyver Zoanoid square in the chin lifting him off the ground, through the air, slamming into and almost through the drilling equipment. Guyver Zoanoid got up and roared as he charged Warrior Guyver and the two again engaged in blade-to-blade battles. The clash of the blades was shatter all the windows of the lookout rooms around the chamber that Chronos was using to monitor the War Relic. But a few minutes of this, and Guyver Zoanoid found his left blade sliced through by Warrior Guyver’s right forward blade. Warrior Guyver then jumped over Guyver Zoanoid inverting himself so that he was upside down facing Guyver Zoanoid, and tried to spear him by stabbing downward with his forward blades. Guyver Zoanoid did his best to dodge and block with his forward blade but still ended up getting sliced down his back. After passing completely over him, Warrior Guyver retracted his forward blades as he landed still upside down on his hands, and flipped away from Guyver Zoanoid, back onto his feet and then turned to face him. Warrior Guyver was surprised by this and took note that his blades are superior to other guyvers. Guyver Zoanoid was just as surprised as he stood looking at his cutoff but regenerating blade. Not to mention his other blade was cracked. “Ha ha…as I said, yesterdays model.” He teased Guyver Zoanoid. But the Guyver Zoanoid had had enough, he roared as he retracted his blade and fired his head beam in rapid pulses. Warrior Guyver was doing his best to dodge these attacks but was struck by two, one in the chest and the other in the stomach, but before either even touched his armor, a body shaped aura shield appeared and stopped them. Guyver Zoanoid refused to acknowledge his defeat as he cupped his hands in front of as the air began to swirl, as energy began to collect from the air into the space between his hands. Warrior Guyver had never seen anything like this, but his hyper sensors were moving in their tracks and warning him of the gathering of gravitational power there. He braced himself for what was to come. Within a matter of a few seconds, the energy had gathered and formed into a pressure cannon. Guyver Zoanoid spread his legs apart further, and thrust his hands forward as the ball of pure destructive energy raced toward Warrior Guyver. He was taken completely by surprised, as he had never seen anything like this before. The only thing he could do was to drop backward on his back by letting his legs give way. While falling, he spread his legs as the pressure cannon passed between them, just missing passing over his upper torso by half a foot. It was so close, that the gravitational wake caused his body shield to activate, protecting him from any damage. He landed on the back of his shoulders, curled himself up into a ball, and bounced back onto his feet. Warrior Guyver thought as he looked at his waist and noticed he had the same thing, except his was pyramid shaped! He then stood up, cupped his hands together and focused on doing the same thing Guyver Zoanoid did. Within a second, the air around him began to warp as from all around him; the gravity began to collect between the palms of his hands. A second or two later, and he held within the palms of his hands a pressure canon like the one Guyver Zoanoid had, but his was more powerful. “Ha-ha…I must admit Guyver Zoanoid, you make a damn good teacher,” he said teasing Guyver Zoanoid as he fired. The Guyver Zoanoid could sense that the gravity ball was powerful, and immediately activated his gravity orb and shot up into the air at the last minute. The blast went on and obliterated some drilling equipment behind him. “Damn you!!” Guyver Zoanoid yelled as he fired off three gravity balls at his opponent. Warrior Guyver rolled out of the way of the first, back flipped to avoid the second, but the third was too close. Just then his control medal flashed, and acting on instinct alone from his unit, he cupped his hands in front of him and formed a gravity shield, but only managed to get it up to partial power. The blast was still stopped but some managed to get through knocking the Warrior Guyver on his back, sliding across the floor about 4 feet. Guyver Zoanoid immediately followed up with rapid fire from his head beam with Warrior Guyver black flipping to avoid the powerful blast as they slammed into the ground each time where he previously was. After the last blast he looked up and saw Guyver Zoanoid just floating there in mid air! He didn’t know Guyver’s could fly. Guyver Zoanoid immediately flew down towards Warrior Guyver brandishing his blades. Warrior Guyver immediately focused on his gravity orb and shot up into the air leaving Guyver Zoanoid to overshoot him. Warrior Guyver, not used to flying yet, was shooting straight up toward the ceiling flaring his arms and legs. He focused his thoughts, then slowed, then stopped, hovered and turned around to face Guyver Zoanoid who had stopped himself and now hovered a few feet off the ground. Now it was Warrior Guyver’s turn, he pointed his arms toward Guyver Zoanoid and fired his arm beams, then as Guyver Zoanoid dodged, he fired three from the orbs on his head. One pierced Guyver Zoanoid’s chest blowing out the backside, the other took his left arm off at the elbow. He slammed into the ground losing his concentration, slamming into the ground. When he looked up, Warrior had charged and fired a double-handed pressure canon, which slammed into Guyver Zoanoids midsection, completely blowing him in two. His upper torso was blown a little over ten feet away, with his lower torso going only a few feet away. The blast created a four-foot wide five-foot deep crater. Warrior Guyver landed and started to approach Guvyer Zoanoids upper torso while slowly extending his blades for the final kill. He was still conscious and trying to sit up using his only intact arm. “It’s been fun, but now, its time to end this.” He said to Guyver Zoanoid as he got closer..”Oh, by the way, the name, is Shenzon” Warrior Guvyer says preparing to make the kill. Purgstall watching all this, knew now was the time to act as his eyes glowed as he sent a telepathic message to the hyper zoanoid team five. Shenzon was now only a few feet from Guyver Zoanoid who knew, his time was about to end, was about to focus his thoughts to mentally open his mega mashers, when he saw Shenzon’s hyper sensor move as he sensed something and looked to the entrance across the chamber. Five beings walked in and immediately transformed into their zoa-forms. The hyper zoanoid team five spread out and prepared to attack. Shenzon charged them, as Darzerb was the first to attack. When Shenzon was close, he fired his napalm breath. Shenzon, not knowing the flames could not harm him, jumped out the way and fired his forehead beam into Darzerb’s shoulder, penetrating deep forcing him to stop blowing his napalm. This let Darzerb know that not even his thick hide could stop Shenzon’s beam. When Shenzon landed, he immediately charged Darzerb and the two met in test of strength. Too Darzerb’s surprise, Shenzon was beginning to overpower him. The next thing he knew, Shenzon had snapped his left arm at the elbow, and then flipped him directly over his back into the ground, creating a ten-foot wide, four foot deep crater. Thancrus’ seeing his comrade in danger, jumped into the air towards Shenzon. One of Shenzon’s hypersensor moved as it detected Thancrus coming. Shenzon turned around, looked up, and then jumped up to meet him while popping out his blades as well. Thancrus immediately fired his head laser with Shenzon bringing his blade up side was and let the blast deflect off of it to somewhere on ground. When the two met in mid-air with their blades, Shenzon’s blade ended up cutting through Thancrus’ and then through him, cutting him in half diagonally, leaving the two halves to fall through the ground. Before Shenzon landed, he could sense power gathering somewhere in front of him, and looked up to see Zektole preparing to fire all his beams. A second later, they fired as he landed, forcing him to immediately jump back out the way, barely missing him but hitting the War Relic behind him causing no damage to the ship. Over to the side waited Gastor, waiting for an opportunity to fire. Shenzon landed in a one kneed crouch and sensed Darzerb up and again charging him. Not having the time to deal with him, he charged him, waiting until he was close, then jump over him simultaneously firing a pressure cannon down into his skull, killing him. But now, it was Gastors turn. He fired his bio-missiles toward Shenzon who sensed them coming and erected a forward facing pressure cannon shield as the blast slammed into the ground in front of him. After all the explosions stopped, their was so much smoke and dirt in the air, the last 3 of hyper zoanoid team five couldn’t see if they hit him or not. A few seconds later, and two lasers fired out hitting Gastor in each of his shoulder pods, followed by an explosion from the two fluids stored within them mixing leaving Elegan and Zektole. I rewrote some, and added a few. Please give advice, good or bad. I tried to improve on my character depth.

I think if Jason knew all of his abilities, especially that one where he split him self to take on that attack, and save his wife at the same, he could definately beat Alkanphel hands down. Possibily even stand a good chance against GZ. Only if he was fully aware of all his abilities though

Yeah that's true, forgot about that..

What if an older man....say 50's or 60's bonded with a Warrior Unit, would it bring his body to the age of a 20 - 30 year old to get the best out of it?

I don't know...the more I think about, I think Dreadnought could win. Not easily, but I think his Matrix and his new abilities will adapt and find a way around his attacks. Maybe even find a weakness. If their was a way he could get his ultimate attack fully powered, I think he could kill the Guyver Zoalord. Speaking of which, any idea what the Guyver Zoalord can withstand unshielded and shielded?

If we did that, it would put Jenny Craig and Atkins Diets out of business!! Lol...

That's a good question. Every time I reread that part, I've always wondered that myself. I would guess all units though as I've always assumed the units would keep their hosts bodies at their bests shape.

Hahaha...

I don't know how I missed that section...well....time for some re-reading

Which fanfic was this in??

ahh ok

When did he take on Zeugma? I had no idea it was her he was figthing??

Ahh...ok. I see what your saying. It would be the exact same teleportation.

The Matrix movie is definately good way to relate it. It makes damn sense if you think of it that. I guess in that situation, you could call W'kar the key maker...

If his nanites got hold of a WG type 2 model, would that give him the use of CPM's to possibly boost, and if so, would it be to 16x or only 12x boost?

Could a Gigantic Unit who is being blocked from transportation, just summon the cocoon, enter it, and escape a teleportation block, like the one eliminator was using? Couldn't Zeus or Dreadnought have teleported that way since he obviously can't block unit activations because the cocoon's come through hyperspace like unit activations, correct? Not through teleportation if I'm not mistaken.